Don’t be too vague. Original: I have a father, a mother, and an older brother. Improved: My dad is a history teacher and my mom coaches volleyball. My older brother is 20 years old. He is currently in college, studying architecture. Original: I enjoy reading books and watching TV. Improved: I love reading about magic or mythology. Some of my favorite books include the Harry Potter series and the Percy Jackson series. I also like to watch TV shows, especially Doctor Who. Don’t share information that may give away your identity or financial information. Original: I live on 1234 Anytown Road. It’s a beautiful area surrounded by trees and waterfalls. Improved: I’m lucky to live in a beautiful place where I am surrounded by trees and waterfalls. Don’t ask invasive questions about your penpal’s life or financial situation. Original: I read that apartments in Beijing are usually very small. Does your family make enough money for you to live in a big apartment? Improved: I’d love to learn more about what it’s like to live in Beijing. What are some things you like to do for fun in the city?