So I’m writing book series now. I just need some tips on my plot. I don’t quite know if it’s strong or if maybe it could use a little bit of help.
Plot: The world has been contaminate from nuclear weaponry and is forced to evacuate the survivors to concentration camps. The ones that have military training or some sort of needed ability is moved to the SLIS (Supreme Legacy of Intelligence and Science) Military Training Facility.
My main protagonist is Ari. He serves in the SLIS Military. His friends’ names are Mike and Jess. The thing is, the three of them don’t know that the SLIS purposely nuked the world so that evolution could create a new, stronger one. Soon, he will be left with the decision of trusting the SLIS, or going to save the survivors from the organization that only wishes to eliminate them.
So I would like to have your personal opinion on the plot of my story. The genre is Action/Adventure. Thanks for any critical opinion. =)
@WarriorOfEden
Hmm, that’s a very good point. There actually is a romantic twist to the story, too. Jessica (Jess) really likes Ari, but they don’t ever have much time to spend together because they’re always being assigned Searches. Ari likes her too, but he doesn’t know if she likes him back. There was nuclear war that had taken place a few years before the Earth was announced “contaminated” and “inhabitable.”
Ari had grown up in a very unfortunate environment. His father left his mom when he was only five. Ari wanted to pursue his dream of snowboarding, and he dropped out of school to do it, but his mother strongly went against that desire. One day, while he was watching television, his program was interrupted by an “important message.” The was an nuclear attack on a city near him and they were ordered to head to a bunker. His mom wasn’t at home because she was working. That was the last time he saw her, sadly. That’s Ari’s backstory. What should I do to improve it?
That sounds really cool! Like @WarriorofEden
said, it has a bit of a sci-fi theme to it.
This kind-of reminds me of C.S. Lewis’s final book in his space trilogy “That Hideous Strength” which happens on earth. It’s actually different though. Not much is the same, other than the action/adventure/sci-fi.
Well, it’s good to know that some people are interested in my book series. =)
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I see…then do this. You want a lie in the story? Yeah that is cool, but what will make it even better is that Ari uncovers lots of secrets about this organization and wants them to pay for what they did. What are they planning to do next? Why do they want a new, stronger world? Who runs the organization, who is the main villain of this story?
I would make it where Ari and his friends work together to bring them down and save the lives of innocent people and maybe one of their comrades who gets captured by them and endures torture. Maybe even the girl he likes gets captured and he has to rescue her? Hehehehe it is your choice, you decide what you want
@NatarianQueen
Definitely! Most of those are really good points that would be well incorporated into the story! Oh, and maybe, if you want, can I put your name in the Acknowledgments section at the end of my book? You’ve definitely helped me out. It’s totally up to you, though. =)
Ooh! And maybe they are forced to work (like always having cameras on them to make sure they are working) which makes it harder for them to escape (whatever they’re trying to escape from)… Like maybe there’s a place underground where there is training and working to “make the world a better place”.
@LeahlovesGod
Ooh, good idea! Maybe they have drones that follow them! Oh gosh, I’m flooding with ideas!!!
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Yes but urm… this might not be a good idea for you to put my name on it, I have many dark secrets and I am also a writer (even though I am not using my real name for it), I also have Autism and PTSD, if people find out about me and find where I am… goodness knows what will happen. I cannot really risk my name being exposed…
Then again a lot of people have done this, even famous writers like J.K Rowling have done it and so far nothing bad has happened to anybody that was mentioned that i know of so go ahead if you really want.
@NatarianQueen
Ooh, okay. Well, I won’t do it if you are uncomfortable with it. I respect everyone’s privacy. But thank you for your help soo much.=)
Okay then! I just don’t want you getting hurt or anything.
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I like this, I did have a thread specifically for writers and poets alike but it got closed… if you like writing so much, maybe we can reopen a new thread :)
This has a taste of Sci-fi to it too, I can help you a little. First things first, I need to know more detail, have you drafted your story yet? Is there going to be any romance/affairs in this story? Backstory of characters and what happened, what caused the world to be virtually inhabitable? You said nukes but I need to know more… was there a nuclear war or maybe a scientific experiment that went terribly wrong? Tell me all that you can
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Well actually I don’t mind at all, you are not the first one to do this anyway. I have a couple of Facebook friends that are writers and they are doing this too, so go ahead :)
I guess I will find a way to fight off people who don’t like people like me
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Nah, I was just being a bit paranoid
(I get paranoid easily)
